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We can
draw lines and give them names
like elements
as they are discovered

Or etch into our skins
this soloecal desire
until it is impossible to tell
where words stop
and life begins.

I would

Find a common rhythm that includes
you in my arms, my hands
and lungs and thoughts
tracing the outline of you
entangled with me
colliding like two lost particles
locked in a shared gravity
drifting through the vacuum
of space.

  I could.

Exhale, and
remember
sentence structure.
Pure, unedited.
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If by ~nawkaman is masterfully written, pausing at pivotal moments to wind down to the poet becoming aware of himself. ( Featured by Nichrysalis )
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halcyonshores Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Purely amazing.
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nawkaman Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2013
Thank you:heart:
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halcyonshores Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
The pleasure is mine. :nod:
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CrematedMan Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2012  Student Writer
The first stanza is magnificent. The rest is quality, and does not suffer for its authenticity, quite the opposite.
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nawkaman Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2012
Thank you for the :+fav: and even more for the comment. I often find my inability to effectively edit my own poetry to be a shortcoming. Here, however, this particular thought does not want or need to be painstakingly crafted.
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poetries Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2012
:faint: :heart:
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nawkaman Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2012
Thank you :heart:

You have quite an amazing gallery, yourself. :nod:
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poetries Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2012
Thank you! :)
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BLUScoutlol Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Student Digital Artist
this is lovely, it gives me goose bumps as i read it c:
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nawkaman Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012
Thank you! :)
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