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We can
draw lines and give them names
like elements
as they are discovered

Or etch into our skins
this soloecal desire
until it is impossible to tell
where words stop
and life begins.

I would

Find a common rhythm that includes
you in my arms, my hands
and lungs and thoughts
tracing the outline of you
entangled with me
colliding like two lost particles
locked in a shared gravity
drifting through the vacuum
of space.

  I could.

Exhale, and
remember
sentence structure.
Pure, unedited.
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Given 2012-12-11
If by ~nawkaman is masterfully written, pausing at pivotal moments to wind down to the poet becoming aware of himself. ( Featured by Nichrysalis )
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cristinewakesuphappy Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
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nawkaman Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2014
:heart:
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halcyonshores Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Purely amazing.
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nawkaman Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2013
Thank you:heart:
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halcyonshores Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
The pleasure is mine. :nod:
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CrematedMan Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2012  Student Writer
The first stanza is magnificent. The rest is quality, and does not suffer for its authenticity, quite the opposite.
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nawkaman Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2012
Thank you for the :+fav: and even more for the comment. I often find my inability to effectively edit my own poetry to be a shortcoming. Here, however, this particular thought does not want or need to be painstakingly crafted.
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poetries Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2012
:faint: :heart:
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nawkaman Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2012
Thank you :heart:

You have quite an amazing gallery, yourself. :nod:
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poetries Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2012
Thank you! :)
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BLUScoutlol Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Student Digital Artist
this is lovely, it gives me goose bumps as i read it c:
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nawkaman Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012
Thank you! :)
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BLUScoutlol Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Student Digital Artist
of course >u<
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shadowkat87 Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Hobbyist
Beautiful, beautiful work. Simple but strong. Direct but complex. Well deserved DD. Rock on!
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nawkaman Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012
Thank you! And you, as well with the rocking!
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Relixala Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012
What a fantastic piece of writing! It was an amazing read. I'd love to be able to write like this.
Congratulations on your DD!
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nawkaman Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012
Thank you! :)
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stealthyninja21 Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Student General Artist
i get it. haha. you got me hooked on the first line
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nawkaman Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012
Glad the meaning came through:heart:
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Chesshirestripes Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Just... woah...
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nawkaman Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012
Thanks!


BTW, in my head you said that like Neo in The Matrix.
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Chesshirestripes Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
No problem!

And nice!
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LlikeOaVsinE Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
i love it >w< tho the last line confuses me a bit
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nawkaman Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012
NicSwaner described it pretty much exactly like it happened. It felt like I wrote this in one breath, and when I thought I had finished I typed out the last stanza sort of to myself.

Thanks :heart:
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LlikeOaVsinE Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
thats amazing~! i love it when pieces like this just sorta come to you & you flow w/ it
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MooMooIceCream Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Pure is the only word that I would use to describe this. Beautiful.
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nawkaman Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012
Thank you :heart:
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lord-grimaldus Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Stellar.
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nawkaman Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012
Thanks :)
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Amber-and-Megan Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012
Very meaningful! Lovely!
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nawkaman Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012
Thank you :hug:
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Trillatia Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012   Writer
Wow, just lovely. :)
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nawkaman Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012
Thanks!
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aerith167 Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Professional Photographer
I love it so much <3
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nawkaman Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012
Thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed it. :heart:
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aerith167 Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Professional Photographer
sweet :)
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DreamingRoxas96 Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Student Writer
Wow it says so beautiful things... and the way it's written makes it so good to read
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nawkaman Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012
Thanks, I was in a good space writing this. Made it easy to just let it come out.
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SecretlyFading Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Student Writer
The best kind is the pure, raw.

Wonderful indeed.
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nawkaman Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012
Maybe not always the best in technique, but certainly very honest.

I wish I were better at editing, though. Writing pure, raw emotion is a capricious skill. At least for me.

Thank you very much for the kind words! :)
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SecretlyFading Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2012  Student Writer
You're very welcome ^_^
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Karinta Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Student General Artist
So true!
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SecretlyFading Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2012  Student Writer
:3
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metal-steffi Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
:heart:
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nawkaman Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012
Thanks! :hug:
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skye-eyes Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012
beautiful word structure!
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nawkaman Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012
Thanks!
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Me-is-totaly-awesome Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Hobbyist Filmographer
This is too beautifull for me to handle it.:iconcannotevenplz:Amazing job.:iconmeawplz:
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nawkaman Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012
Thanks! And I apologize, next time I'll ugly it up a little. :)
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Me-is-totaly-awesome Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2012  Hobbyist Filmographer
:nuu:If you do that I'll kill you...
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