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Quake the Earth

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You were
drinking
from the rust-rim
galaxy
in quick sips and swallowed stars,
like those remembered
at the bottom of the glass.

I slept
drunk
from the orogeny
of your subduction,
dreaming
of your skin sliding to a fit
against mine
and the tremors we could make.
I do so very much love language. Every once in a while it just seems to fit perfectly together.

I think I'll take a look at this again in the morning to see if I can revise and make it stronger.

It's late and I'm not sure how well I accomplished the effect I wanted in the second stanza, and the meaning of the first might be a bit too hidden.
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rlkirkland's avatar
Well now, a DLD for your fine efforts. :)
Congratulations! :sun: