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You were
drinking
from the rust-rim
galaxy
in quick sips and swallowed stars,
like those remembered
at the bottom of the glass.

I slept
drunk
from the orogeny
of your subduction,
dreaming
of your skin sliding to a fit
against mine
and the tremors we could make.
I do so very much love language. Every once in a while it just seems to fit perfectly together.

I think I'll take a look at this again in the morning to see if I can revise and make it stronger.

It's late and I'm not sure how well I accomplished the effect I wanted in the second stanza, and the meaning of the first might be a bit too hidden.
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rlkirkland Feb 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Well now, a DLD for your fine efforts. :)
Congratulations! :sun:
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:iconnawkaman:
Thank you! My first DLD :)
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Sammur-amat Feb 5, 2013   General Artist
Very well deserved, too! :heart:
Congratulations, sugar! :squee:
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:iconnawkaman:
Thank you, dear. You are far too kind :heart:
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Sammur-amat Feb 5, 2013   General Artist
Only because, again, you are most deserving. (:
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xlntwtch Feb 3, 2013   Writer
Congratulations on the DLD feature! I hope you leave this pretty much as it is.
I like it, especially the second strophe. Thank you. :+fav:
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:iconnawkaman:
Thank you so much! It's my first DLD and I'm quite proud. I am fairly sure I will leave everything just as it is, it seems my initial concerns were unfounded given the reception I've gotten with this one.
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xlntwtch Feb 4, 2013   Writer
:iconyourewelcomesignplz:...and you should be very proud.
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:icondailylitdeviations:
Your wonderful literary work has been chosen to be featured by DLD (Daily Literature Deviations) in a news article that can be found here [link]
Be sure to check out the other artists featured and show your support by :+fav:ing the News Article.

Keep writing and keep creating.
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LadyofGaerdon Jan 20, 2013  Professional Writer
So beautiful and resonant.
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